An Attempt at Rewriting

Academic:
 Being in downtown Brooklyn you see some awful things.  Whether it be robbery down the street or even murder.  Being a parent, those are the very last things you want your child to see.
  Or being an adult and still seeing the pointless flashbacks of yourself sitting in a living room with no furniture as as a kid.
   Or what about a four year old boy walking around the city by himself.  Obviously not supposed to be there, but  nobody comes over and asks where his mother is at.

Personal:
   When people in the minority would look at immigrants it was almost like they were more American than them.  The immigrants wanted to be American,  but all the minority wanted to do was keep their culture.

Reaction:  i felt that this exercise was rough.  I found it difficult to rewrite someone's work and still say what they said originally.